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Choking On False Reality by ~TearsOfTorment:iconTearsOfTorment:



The stars can witness this statement.
I know I can get caught up in the moment.
I can feel you pulling me through the time warp
That separates me from everyone else.

There's a burning sensation in my eyes
And I'm not sure if it's from pain
Or if it's from the scars I have
From being in love.

The tears are falling.
Just like me.
I hate all of my past, and the memories
That the stars hold on to for me.

Hold on to me, and hold me close.
For I feel as If I'm falling,
Maybe not falling
As much as I'm drowning.

Drowning as I choke on the
False reality I've created for myself
Hoping the bad things will disappear
But they can't just disappear.

I realize they won't just disappear;
This isn't make-believe anymore
As I feel the knife of reality
Cut into my soul.
©2005-2009 ~TearsOfTorment
:icontearsoftorment:

Author's Comments

A down day can do all kinds of things to poetry. I don't think this is my best, but I hope you all like it and can make some sense out of it.

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:iconimmensedream:
The first stanza is the best. The rest is....general.
:iconangelize:
wow. to be honest with you.. i think that was one of my favorites from you!

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*I'm crazy.. no doubt about it. Just happy to be me*
:icontearsoftorment:
Thank-you :)

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One-way Ticket Nowhere,
There's No Windows On This Train;
Can't See Where I'm Headed,
But I'm Going There Again.
:icontearsoftorment:
I like the first stanza the best too. Thank-you for your comments.

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One-way Ticket Nowhere,
There's No Windows On This Train;
Can't See Where I'm Headed,
But I'm Going There Again.
:iconsweetheart18:
I realize they won't just disappear;
This isn't make-believe anymore
As I feel the knife of reality
Cut into my soul.

Wow...that's good. Incredible poem. :clap:

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:heart: His Perfect Blue-Eyed Angel :heart:
:floating:

:gallery:
:icontearsoftorment:
Thank-you :)

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One-way Ticket Nowhere,
There's No Windows On This Train;
Can't See Where I'm Headed,
But I'm Going There Again.
:icontearsoftorment:
:blushes:

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One-way Ticket Nowhere,
There's No Windows On This Train;
Can't See Where I'm Headed,
But I'm Going There Again.
:iconlovelyjadedloner:
I like the imagery I get from the first line... I can see the stars all with eyes writing out what they see of you. Draws me in. Overall, good piece, although at some parts, it seems a little cliche.

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<3 Lj

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March 23, 2005
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